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Zach Hershey:如何从课外活动中找到你的闪光点

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课外活动经历之所以是出国留学申请材料中的加分项,很重要的原因就是它可以从侧面体现出申请者的能力和想法。但是很多同学却不知道该怎么找到、突出这些亮点。今天我们采访了天道外籍顾问Zach Hershey,希望他的讲解可以帮助到大家。

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  课外活动经历之所以是出国留学申请材料中的加分项,很重要的原因就是它可以从侧面体现出申请者的能力和想法。但是很多同学却不知道该怎么找到、突出这些亮点。今天我们采访了天道外籍顾问Zach  Hershey,希望他的讲解可以帮助到大家。以下内容是根据采访录音整理的文字稿,如有部分措辞不准确请大家见谅!

  Zach Hershey采访视频:

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  问:For most Chinese students, it is difficult for them to find potentials of  themselves through extracurricular activities, could you give us some examples  of presenting unique characteristics from the details in extracurricular  activities?

  很多中国学生常看不到自己经历中的闪光点,希望您举例说说课外活动中的细节能怎样体现出学生的特质。

  答:Yes, so actually the most important thing for activities is not only to  show you have experienced many things, but you also can show what specific  things motivated you to do this, to do those activities. Because most of people  are not going to choose to stand in front of a big group of people that they  don’t know, and give the speech because they want to. A lot of people are very  shy, very nervous; they are not going to get in front of people and talk. They  are not going to go, meet new people and go out to do volunteer work.

  实际上最重要的活动不仅是展示你经历了很多事情,你也可以表现是什么促使你做了这些活动。因为大多数人都不愿站在一大群陌生人面前进行演讲。很多人都很害羞,很紧张,他们不会与面前的人聊天。他们不会去认识新朋友,去做志愿者工作。

  So one of the things that shows in your activity list and your essay about  your activity actually show is who you are the person in terms of your ability  to get out of your comfort zone, your ability to go and try new things, your  interest, your curiosity. Those are the most important things that you are going  to give out of the activities and the essay. One of the big things that a lot of  students have trouble with when they are talking about their activities in their  essay is they like to say things like I am a leader, or I learned great  leadership skills from this activity.

  你活动中显示的事和你关于活动的文书中实际上显示出你是个怎样的人,你有能力走出自己的舒适区,你有能力去尝试新鲜事物,你的兴趣和好奇心。这些都是你做活动和写文书的最重要的事。另一件需要注意的是,很多学生在文书中讲他们的活动时会出现问题,比如他们喜欢说我是领导者,或者我从活动中学到了领导能力。

  You don’t need to say those things, because the important thing that should  happen when you are writing your essay is that you talk about the experience you  had, the things that you did, then from those specific things you say about that  activity. The reader, whether that is like me or that is someone at the  university actually reading your application letter, they should be able to take  from those activities, from those little events within the activities you talk  about, and say “oh, this person must be this way” instead of saying I am a  leader, show how you are a leader, talk about what you did that makes you think  you are a leader.

  你不需要说这些,因为起作用的是你在写文书时,提到从活动中一些具体的事情经验和你曾经做过什么。无论你申请文书的读者是否是我,还是大学中某个人,他们将能从这些活动中,从你谈到的这些活动的小事情中,总结出“这个人一定是这样的”,而不是学生(在文书中)说我是一个领导者。展现你如何成为一个领导者,谈谈你做了什么使你认为你一个是领导者。

  Because if you think you are a leader because of these things, I probably  will too. That is the important thing in the essay. You can’t say I am this, I  am that, don’t use all these adjectives, show what you did, use verbs, use your  action to show who you are rather than write in your essay I am this kind of  person, that is not the important thing. You want to show me who you are and not  to tell me. I know there is a combination of show and tell, while in the essay;  you really want to talk about showing, and not telling. I don’t want to read a  list; I want to read a story. That is the important thing.

  如果通过一些活动你就认为自己是个领导者,那么我可能也能这么说。这是文书中重要的一点,你不能说我是这个那个,不要用形容词显示你所做的。要用动词,用你的行动来显示你是谁,而不是在文书写我就是这种人,那根本不重要。你想展现你是谁,但是不要直接告诉我。在申请文书中,需要结合展现和叙述,你得把你是怎样的人娓娓道来,而不是直接说出来。我不想读内容罗列的文书,我想读故事,这是非常重要的一点。

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