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Prof. Robert Joseph Lefkowitz said, science is like peeling an onion. I agree: there is always another layer to peel away. Learning about Duke is also like peeling an onion. The more I learn about Duke, the more I want to go. The motto “Eruditio et Religio” matches my impulse to view my neurobiology project on emotion in the context of religion. The next layer revealed the Duke Focus program - indispensible for me to pursue neuroscience while also receiving interdisciplinary training in an integrative and interactive setting. Peeling another layer and talking to current students, I have fallen in love with Southern hospitality. I am eager to join in the Duke Engage program, traveling and helping both locally but globally. At the sweet core of the onion, I can’t wait to paint my face blue, rushing into Baldwin Auditorium and cheering for the Blue Devils.
——Duke Tiandao2014 Supplement Essay 科学就像一层层剥开一只洋葱，而杜克给我的惊喜和吸引正是如此。
I smelled the apple. The fresh scent mirrored my newfound eagerness. Two years’ study made me become accustomed to encountering problems. Change did not seem so scary anymore, no matter whether it was a difficult project, a new school, or a foreign country. I was eager to challenge the unknown. I would apply the strategy I had learned in the studio: to openly recognize my shortcomings and to make changes in single steps. Where I had seen problems now lay boundless opportunity.
I urgently restarted my sketch. My subject: so vivid in my mind that there was no need to look at the model. Myself: so confident that there was no need to be worried about the unknown. As I drew, I repeated what has since become my mantra: “It is in my hands.”
——Cornell Tiandao2014 Common Essay 用细腻的笔触描述了速写一个苹果的过程，并延伸至学习绘画中的成长
Most of us experience fairly similar “preparation” as we move from kindergarten to university and finally to the workplace, but as a result of our essentially different natures, we develop into unique individuals. Some people are like onions who quickly abandon their pungent odor and become sweet and inviting in the pan. Some, including me, are like carrots who require long periods of simmering to be softened. If you are a carrot, take your time to explore yourself in depth and expand your horizons; it is your nature to assimilate energy at a slow but steady pace. Do not waste all of your time envying the onions; they have their glossy appearances and tasty aroma, but you have your profound heartiness and long‐lasting fresh taste.
——Pomona Tiandao2014 Common Essay 从欢快的烹饪场景，引申到人生的启发“Understand yourself and stay true.”
Yes, the enzyme, a catalyst that people usually overlook. We always seem to focus more on the reactants and the products, just as we prefer to admire founders and leaders, those who achieve great success and are in the ‘spotlight’. I struggled, just like everyone else, to be the “most” important. Now, however, I know that I prefer to be an enzyme, managing the dynamic reactions within an organism and keeping life healthy from behind the scenes. Explaining difficult biology problems to my classmates, volunteering to play the background music, writing the script for the school broadcasting station, organizing talent shows to make other people shine, I strive to be the invisible yet strong wing that helps others fly.
——Duke Tiandao2014 Common Essay 学生用生物酶来比拟自己在团队中的作用，人生的价值和追求
Admittedly, I do enjoy the benefits of learning from others. Captivated by the magic of guitar after my friend’s performance at an art fair, I picked up guitar as a hobby. Now I can pass on the fun of guitar to disabled kids in specialized school. I signed up for the math club after seeing how girls flocked to the captain, but now the equations, curves, and coordinates have cemented my belief in the beauty of science. A skillful guitarist, a geeky mathematician, a swift swimmer—they have all become indispensable parts of me. Yet I am no longer satisfied by copying others’ success, as I was living others’ lives at the cost of my own identity.
——Brown Tiandao2014 Common Essay 展示个人光辉和优点的同时，结合了对自己的反思，显得更有深度
This past summer, when my family was traveling in Scandinavia, I decided instead to fly in the opposite direction to Cold Spring Harbor, to study at the lab of James Watson, the discoverer of DNA structure. I was not surprised to be fascinated by all of the pure biology in the courses; I was not surprised to be the only non‐American student, and I was not surprised by the questions about why I flew half way around the planet just for two weeks in a silly lab. In fact, I am no stranger to such questions. People would ask why I spend time reading so many long and tedious papers when all I need is to finish a small report on yeast. People would ask me why I am dying to know how much of Pistia’s dry mass is made up of its hairs. I have no better answer than to say, “There is so much more biology in these little things and I just love knowing it. I am following my heart.”
——JHU Tiandao2014 Common Essay 以具体的实际行动（暑期活动）展现了申请人对生物研究的极大热忱
“Architecture” at Cornell is more than just a course of study, it is an idea. Growing up in a city only born only 30 years ago, I have experienced how architecture could change my world and my life. I always wondered: “What is architecture?” I carried this question from China to Cornell. I found my answer. Cornell teaches me that Architecture is a medium through which to improve the world by the management of structure and space. Before I came to Cornell, I viewed each structure as an individual; however, Professor Henry Richardson taught me something different in class: Architecture is a community aspect and should be valued within a continuous historical context.
——Cornell Tiandao2014 Supplement Essay 讲述了在康奈尔学习的经历，将深度思考，学术追求与学校选择完美结合
At first I couldn’t understand why learning Chán involved carrying water for the temple. The rugged road was built with irregular rocks; buzzing insects were everywhere; the sun scorched my head and the muscles in my shoulders burned. I soon spilled most of the water in my buckets. Seeing my failure, the others offered to help. We adjusted my breathing, balanced two buckets around my shoulders and focused on nothing but the art of walking. Such sharp focus was really tough in that environment, but I kept improving. The hard labor trained me to remain calm and to concentrate despite outside influence. This is basic Chán. Now, when I encounter difficulty, Chán permeates my mind as I immerse myself in the problem.
——Chicago Tiandao2014 Supplement Essay 以佛学社的亲身体验，阐述了对“禅”的理解及其对自身的影响
Though drastically different in terms of language, documentary authors and Misty Poets share the courage to seek and reveal the truth, and the willingness to change the world through their own actions. I identify with this goal as an essential part of my own academic motivation. These artists’ courage to promote the truth despite the status quo inspired me to investigate Chinese stock market below the surface, to explore its flaws, and to shape my dream of improving my country’s markets through my own knowledge and practice.
——Chicago Tiandao2014 Supplement Essay 将纪实文学与诗歌的意义与经济学的专业追求融合，并在文尾得以升华
Dear Mantis Shrimp,
Maybe you’re bragging to your fellows about your privilege over humans.Maybe you’re observing the electrical waves running through my neurons. Maybe you’re wondering why this weird man is constantly strolling in front of the aquarium.But before you break the glass and jump onto my face,I’m gonna tell you something about humans.Indeed,you’re cool for your admirable eyes, but As multispectral as your life may be, I bet you can see little meanings from it.We humans are cooler, for we can see beyond basic colors the crucial spirits of life. Seriously, WE ARE MISSING NOTHING.
——Chicago Tiandao2014 Supplement Essay 通过与螳螂虾的对话，引出人类对色彩背后的含义与洞见的讨论
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是全校数一数二。在撰写文书的同时，Q同学陆续斩获了两个奖项。一个是学校的优秀毕业生，一个是National AP Awards。我们立刻就在网申里面强调了这两个奖项。
顾问点评：学生属于对社会学科，特别是人类学专业很执着和热爱， Harvard SSP项目对学生专业的选择与确定影响很大，在Harvard的课堂上，学生接触到了一个教授用人类学研究的相关知识帮助美国当地居民赢得一起诉讼案，让学生感觉到人类学知识的奇妙作用，以及在我们生活中人类学知识无处不在，但国内没有系统的研究。所以我们给学生的定位是——未来人类学专业在中国的推广者。